ielts essay sample band 6

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✅ q: one of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified foods are a possible solution. to what extent do you agree or disagree, many people today are worried about young children using video games. what problems might these games cause for children and society as a whole how could these problems be reduced, some people think painting and drawings are important as other subjects. they should be compulsory in high school education. to what extent do you agree or disagree, some people think that drug addicts should be treated like criminals and sent to jail, while others believe that they should be treated like patients and sent to hospital. discuss both views and give your own opinion., the world of work is changing rapidly and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. discuss the possible causes for this rapid change, and suggest ways of preparing people for the world of work in the future. give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience., some people think that individuals are becoming more dependent on each other in modern society, while others believe that individuals are becoming more independent of each other. discuss both views and give your own opinion., some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. discuss both these views and give your own opinion, some people say that the governments should pay for health care and education but others think that this is not the government’s responsibility. discuss both these views and give your opinion., many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events. do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, more and more people are becoming seriously overweight. some people think the solution can be to increase the price of fattening foods. to what extent do you agree or disagree, public celebrations( such as national days, festivals, etc) are held in most countries. theses are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things do you agree or disagree, some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. why is this the case do you think this is a positive or a negative development, while some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. discuss both sides and give your opinion., nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). in many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages, some people like to eat in restaurants and at foodstands, others like to eat at home. which do you prefer give reasons and examples to support your choice., some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. discuss both these views and give your own opinion. give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. you should write at least 250 words., car drivers and cyclists share the same roads, and this can cause problems for both of them. why is this the case what measures can be taken to solve these problems, some claim that studying abroad has great benefits for student's home country. to extent agree or disagree., more and more people prefer consuming food imports from foreign countries, instead of domestically produced foodstuff. what are the reasons and solutions, in many countries, young people move to cities leaving their homes in rural areas for work or study. what do you think are the reasons for it do you think advantages for moving to cities outweigh disadvantages.

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These are IELTS Writing Task 2 band 6 examples (or 6.5) of essays that have been submitted by candidates practising for the test. There are also  basic comments on the score for each criteria by an experienced IELTS instructor. 

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Topic: Water Shortages (band 6)

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem.

What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

Fresh water resource is a worldwide issue, that is related to varied factors, and it should be involve every country in the world. This essay will illustrate some reasons of the increasing demand and some solutions to solve as soon as possible.

Nowadays, because of industrialization, many European country has resolved this problem because every citizen are able to get drinkable water, but there is a huge difference with the third countries. Although, European people do not miss water, limited water resource is becoming a global emergency that could affect every nation.

Firstly, the rising request is related to the overpopulation; that is the reason why Chinese government has tried to reduce and regulate birth, so they have got the power to limit and control the population growth; this is not a reasonable political action to take.

Secondly, the overpopulation has caused a growing demand of food, so further water has been used by farmer for agriculture; moreover, not all the farms have an appropriate and modern infrastructures and machines to give water to the soil, consequently a huge amount of this natural resource is wasted.

A solution could be taken by local governments, such as, investments in new technologies, which are able to reuse water from soil, or more invested money on the creation of food in laboratories, in this last scenario a vast amount of water could be saved.

In addition, global warming has affected significantly this issue, for this reason international cooperation should try to reduce the environment changing to preserve water, avoiding deforestation and pollution, increasing renewable energy. I would suggest teaching and educating children and students to save water in everyday life, these lessons could help them to notice their usage in their private house.

In conclusion, I think some solutions could be found to fix the problem; however, we should work all together to make the difference.

Task Response: 6

You have discussed the issues quite well but not all are fully explained . You have mentioned that global warming is a cause near the end but you haven’t explained why it leads to water shortage. You also have some irrelevant information like the body paragraph after the introduction or this sentence which is not related to the question: “ this is not a reasonable political action to take .” Fix these issues and you are likely nearer a 7 for TR. 

Coherence & Cohesion: 6

You do have issues with organisation and CC. As mentioned above – you introduce ‘ global warming ’, a ‘ cause ’ near the end. Surely this should be with the other ‘ causes ’ at the start of the essay. Also you have lots of short paragraphs. Put the causes in one paragraph and the solutions in the next paragraph. I’m also not sure what the first body paragraph after the introduction is for as it does not relate to causes or solutions - it looks like you might be introducing the issue, but don't waste time on this. Focus on directly answering the question.  

Lexical Resource: 6

Vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but you have some problems with the way you use lexis, such as saying "solutions to solve".

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 6

This is probably just a 6 but it's borderline 5. You do have quite a few small errors, especially nearer the start, though it improves as your essay progresses. Particularly noticeable is issue with punctuation. You are using commas when you need full-stops or some kind of transition. Check out how you need to punctuate to avoid ‘comma splices’.

Topic: Reading & Writing Skills (Band 6)

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, our life improved by technology developments. Although some people think that communication through computers and mobile phones increased and has a detrimental effect on how young generation develop their skills in reading and writing, others think that this impact of technology is not a disadvantage. I strongly belive that young people reading and writing skills have suffered due to increasing usage of computers and mobile phones.

To begin with, technology  increases day by day and we have to be aware of what is new and implement it on our everyday life. It is certainly known that communication through online platforms it is more easier than the usual one and currently it is vital to have at least one tool like mobile phone or computer if someone wants to have an online conversation with somebody else. A survey was conducted on young subjects in 2007, in the United Kingdom and almost 90% of their respondents agreed with the fact that communication using devices is easier and more effective than using traditional ways and they looked more willing to use a device, like a digital book rather than have similar reading like in the previous generations.

To add more, there are many situations which provide that communication using only devices can be deficitary and it involves a lot of disadvantages. First and foremost, young generation can not experience the biggest pleasure of reading a new book, feeling the fragrance of their pages while sitting at the desk. Also, from the primary school, children learn how to effectively write and this situation needs improvement every day, because currently during the classes, many children get distracted and try to avoid what is vital for a society: to know how to correctly write. What is more, it has been proven that writing on a device decrease the rate of concentration in left emisphere of the brain and ought to this issue, many health problems can appear and develop. Nevertheless, technology development is an insurmontable situation that can not be stopped. During the years 2010-2020, a study was made using foreign students from my University and the results shown that those who used devices like mobile phones or computers in order to communicate had a lower rate of learning our mother tongue than others who concentrated on traditional books. Furthermore, a long period of time looking at blue screens affected the visual content and therefore most of them needed to see an Ophtalmologist.

To conclude, it is evident that communication is the most striking feature in our everyday life and both traditional and digital paths can be used, but younger generation needs to be aware of the disadvantages of using most of the time only devices like computers and mobile phones, because the drawbacks can outweigh more than the positive effects.

Task Response: 5

Much of your answer if you look does not actually answer the question - how are reading and writing skills affected. You address this briefly in body para 2 but your whole response should address this. 

For a 7, each body paragraph should have a central idea but your essay does not appear to do this. It gets confusing as to what the main idea of each is as you discuss positives and negatives.

Lexical Resource: 7

Grammatical range and accuracy: 7.

Lexis and grammar are stronger points in your essay; however, there are still quite a few obvious grammar errors so GR is borderline 6/7. You are writing too much. Reduce the amount you write and focus on brainstorming (making sure your ideas answer the question) planning, organising and checking grammar. There are some lessons here you may find useful.

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IELTS band 6.5 sample essay

Below we have a band 6.5 essay graded by an ex-IELTS examiner.

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Each criteria has been considered and the sentence in the essay has been colour coded to correspond to the fours marking criteria used by the British Council / IELTS IDP .

LR - Lexical Resource CC - Cohesion and Coherence TR - Task Response GR - Grammatical Range and Accuracy

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Today, most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

The issue of early weddings followed by a pregnancy before thirties (LR1) has grown  in importance over the past few years (GR1) / (TR1) . This is a common dream between  many women (LR2) , but nowadays this dream is facing drastic changes due to many  factors. Globalization, economic crises and increasing population numbers (TR2)  are  contributing for that (LR3) . I strongly believe that couples need to be aware and  convicts of their situation (LR4) before decide (GR2) to have children before thirties.

LR1 - You have the right idea with paraphrasing - but it’s vital to ensure that your language use remains natural. This sounds a bit odd.

GR1 - Accurate use of the present perfect with a time expression.

TR1 - On the right track with your opening sentence.

LR2 - ? This doesn’t make sense.

TR2 - Be sure to focus on the question. It isn’t asking you why this situation came about.

LR3 - contribute to something

LR4 - Perhaps ‘convinced that it’s the right thing to do’?

GR2 - before deciding

Although an early marriage and pregnancy is a desire for many couples, there  are some factors that need to be considered (CC1). Firstly (CC2), due to the world  economic crises which made the number of available jobs decrease  considerably and also the real state industry increasing prices exponentially,  directly affecting millions of people (CC3) and their dreams of constitute (LR5) a family and  buy the first residence. Secondly, the cost of living is reaching numbers that  average salaries cannot afford (TR3). For example, a study from Boston university (TR4)  showed that nearly one third of the newlyweds in which the couples were (GR3)  below thirties, do not intend to have children. The central reason behind this is (CC4)  the uncertainty of being able to (GR4) provide a decent life for their children (LR6).

CC1 - Accurate use of ‘although’.

CC2 - Good to organise your essay with ‘Firstly…’, ‘Secondly…’.

LR5 - Take care with natural collocation - ‘dreams of having…’

CC3 - Problems with sentence structure / coherence here.

TR3 - Again, you need to focus more on whether it is a positive development rather than why it has happened.

TR4 - Good to use an example to support the point you are making.

GR3 - Accurate use of a relative clause.

CC4 - Good to link your ideas together smoothly.

GR4 - Good accuracy here.

LR6 - Natural use of vocabulary.

However (CC5), this scenario is a tendency for our reality (LR7) these days, I firmly  believe that this situation is a negative development (TR5) in the society. Many  families are being constituted late or even not starting. For example, women (TR6)  having their babies after 35 years old is a risk not only for the mother’s health (GR5),  as well for the baby (GR6) . The child can be born with malformation (TR7) and very weak  with a risk to develop diseases due to their fragile immune system (LR8) . On the  same way the mother, that can face serious health problems and also a big  risk of losing the child.

CC5 - Check the use of ‘however’ - it is not used accurately here. ‘Although’ would work.

LR7 - This sounds unnatural - problems with collocation.

TR5 - Good to respond more directly to the question.

TR6 - Good to use an example to support the point you are making.

GR5 - Very accurate sentence construction here.

GR6 - Perhaps ‘but also for that of the baby’.

TR7 - Now you are starting to answer the question better.

LR8 - Not usually hyphenated but lovely use of collocation.

To conclude (CC6 & 7), a mature decision must be made for (GR7) the couple. Not only the  desire of an early marriage with many sons but, more important than that if  they would be able to provide the basics for the children like a health  environment, education and support (TR8) . In my opinion a balance between the  desire versus reality must be taken in consideration before take a decision (TR9).  After that within the couple limits (GR8) / (LR9) , decide a proper age to get married and have their children.

CC6 - Clear use of paragraphing.

CC7 - You have introduced your final paragraph appropriately.

GR7 - by TR8 - This needs to be more directly related to the question.

TR9 - Again, task achievement could be stronger here.

GR8 - To be grammatically correct, this would need to be possessive - ‘the couple’s limits’.

LR9 - It still sounds a bit odd, though. Perhaps ‘the couple’s financial constraints’?

Probable score: 6.5 / 7.0  

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